tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post8400835567113896386..comments2023-06-14T21:12:22.878+10:00Comments on Meaninless Meandering from a Madmother: Write on Wednesday - The Great One Liner...Madmotherhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/18189416781378632230noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-84899275360109012992011-09-10T22:49:49.512+10:002011-09-10T22:49:49.512+10:00Spot on. Love the reworked sentence. It paints a v...Spot on. Love the reworked sentence. It paints a very clean image. Well done!<br /><br />xInkPaperPenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14595595934607152505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-47289421366269073312011-09-10T09:33:34.649+10:002011-09-10T09:33:34.649+10:00Sorry I'm very late! I adore this sentence, i...Sorry I'm very late! I adore this sentence, it conveys such an awkward feeling, but it's also hilarious! (when someone else is having the feeling, not when it's me!!)Janellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06459852025135239788noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-5032097954839196512011-09-08T21:02:31.217+10:002011-09-08T21:02:31.217+10:00Perfect! I'm glad you reworked it. Great spott...Perfect! I'm glad you reworked it. Great spotting Gill. Isn't it funny how sometimes we can't see things in our own writing?<br />Great job MM. Love the reworked sentence. Very feisty and powerful.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-33305085482899128112011-09-08T17:01:59.116+10:002011-09-08T17:01:59.116+10:00Yes! I agree but didn't know what was clumsy!
...Yes! I agree but didn't know what was clumsy!<br /><br /><i>Was she the only one who was aware this elephant in the room lent an unsurpassed new meaning to the term mammoth?</i>Madmotherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18189416781378632230noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-15595941066042666652011-09-08T16:25:29.266+10:002011-09-08T16:25:29.266+10:00She is back! Great to see you here, I have been wo...She is back! Great to see you here, I have been wondering but knew you had been through a lot recently...<br /><br />I like that the elephant in the room is the mammoth...This is the powerful part of the sentence. It creates suspense and intrigue. I would only question (as you said to rip into it!) whether the first part could be re-worded somehow?<br /><br />"Was she the only one present who was aware"<br /><br />Only because I found myself re-reading it to check the meaning, perhaps you could slim this bit down again? For me, the second part of the sentence is where the power of the piece lies. What do you think?InkPaperPenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14595595934607152505noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-83483426947344580702011-09-08T04:28:10.656+10:002011-09-08T04:28:10.656+10:00I felt the weight of this statement. Great job!I felt the weight of this statement. Great job!Jaimee Hunterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10735348809998154246noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-69759632493952825442011-09-07T17:03:07.261+10:002011-09-07T17:03:07.261+10:00Ha ha...I loved this! Great stuff. xHa ha...I loved this! Great stuff. xJodie Anstedhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12300961546795965857noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-90068999224240302022011-09-07T12:20:37.358+10:002011-09-07T12:20:37.358+10:00Great line :) Well done.Great line :) Well done.Melissahttp://www.melissagijsbers.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-43207737222552984232011-09-07T10:04:03.759+10:002011-09-07T10:04:03.759+10:00Oh, I know this feeling well! Well done!Oh, I know this feeling well! Well done!No onehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05516581267618212776noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-13027467221148519972011-09-07T01:26:18.210+10:002011-09-07T01:26:18.210+10:00Understanding it literally made me smile. But If I...Understanding it literally made me smile. But If I have to look behind the lines,..I'll be lost, enlighten me (I have slow grasp of English)hehe..by the way, thanks for your correction on my one liner, glad you see it..=)Andyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01880911404474923812noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-63007912045172679292011-09-06T17:36:21.690+10:002011-09-06T17:36:21.690+10:00Oh, I LOVE this one! I can almost see her looking...Oh, I LOVE this one! I can almost see her looking round incredulously thinking 'are you all completely dense!'.<br /><br />Really good job.Sarahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04402703967636964187noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-4361480824395722677.post-74251799573219200842011-09-06T14:03:22.522+10:002011-09-06T14:03:22.522+10:00There is nothing to rip apart. I like that it is w...There is nothing to rip apart. I like that it is well written and full of deep meaning. You did an awesome job!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16732006064321712054noreply@blogger.com